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I like your description of the storm from Rikku's perspective and the way that she seems very pleased to avoid all storms by using an airship.

I like the way you play upon Rikku's curiosity by putting her in an unfamiliar environment and letting her explore it.

I love Rikku's deep concern for "Lulu's spiffy boots" grins. I also adore "behold-my-boobs maneuver" giggles. You are good at catching Rikku's sense of fun and silliness.

I love Rikku's complaints about the weather and her teasing about the food and the tea.

I enjoy the idea of Lulu and Yuna hunting. There's another whole fic you could lure me in with right there. You write these women very well.

I love how Rikku decides to beat on her boyfriend herself if she needs to get rid of him. Hee.

laughs and laughs Lulu's breast army. Seriously, I wouldn't have figured you were so brilliant at ridiculous Rikku banter and silly metaphors, but you really truly are.

And then I am just at a loss for words. Really this is all so lovely your description is perfect. For some reason when you put two women into a sexual situation I have absolutely no complaints about how you write about their physical interaction, maybe this is just you coming inbto your own as a writer though, sicne I realize those earlier sex scenes between Auron and Lu in Resurrection were written awhile back. But seriously, your description is gorgeous.

The idea of Lulu writing a spell on Rikku's skin with her nails for instance, wonderful.

Your metaphors are breathtaking. Really, you stagger me with this story. It's so lovely. I adore the idea of Lulu as a sisterly teacher of sexual intimacies.

Rikku saying that it's weird to be with a real friend is heartbreaking.

Hee and the book metaphor is beautiful. You're just so . . . is jealous. Really, I saw you asking on bangonfic if you need help with writing sex and the answer is "NO." You've done brilliantly.

Really, I have no words, I don/t You write their dialogue beautifully. I lie the way that Rikku is still a little playful when they are touching one another.

I love the way that Rikku attributes all kind of magic to Lulu's touches, the way she feels like Lulu commands the storm.

Also you know I hope this doesn't approach TMI, but it's nice to read fic by someone who obviously KNOWS ABOUT SEX. That is very good.

I adore Rikku's revelling in her power to make Lulu feel good.

This was awesomely lovely. I am so glad to have read it.

Nitpicking:
"Don't tell me you're shy of getting naked all of the sudden!" Replace "the" with "a."