First off, thanks for giving DSB it's first review! XD That made me feel sooo much better.
Second, I like the way this story is starting out. I think this could be really interesting and I plan to keep my eye on it.
However, I think you should go back and beta check this sucker because it's all one giant paragraph. ^^ That and there are a few spelling errors. I hate to sound like an English teacher but I'm just bringing it up because it sounds like a really good story but with those kind of errors you could scare people off!
Overall: Great start of a story, fix the bugs.
Author\'s Response: Yeah, I looked at it again, and saw the bugs, and swore up and down. The spelling errors happen, when I speed type. The reason it is, the way it is..is because I uploaded it from wordpad...-_- Thank you for the review.