Review for Phantom Sight

Phantom Sight

(#) yojorocks 2007-08-18

Interesting idea, buy you need to work a bit on the flow of the story; it seemed a bit chopped up, like you were just trying to get your idea down without framing it properly; don't get me wrong, it is a very interesting idea, but you need to transition a bit cleaner between the old thoughts and the current moods and actions. Overall, good work.