(#) NAPPA 2007-08-30
Okay - your story as a whole is far more detailed, far more interesting and definately better written than JKR's. I know I critiqued the previous chapter a bit harshly. After reading this chapter, I think overall the previous chapter was alright. I still think the Hermione/Winky conversation seemed odd because of wordiness.
Anyway, the way you tied it all up was brilliant. I did have a question that doesn't seem to be adressed here. Where is Luna ? It seemed like Luna is what Hermione and Harry are finding at the se club, is something up with her. Did I miss something ? Is it intentionally left unanswered to make your readers squirm! Because this reader is doing so.
Author's response
No, I left Luna where JKR left her in her interviews -- exploring the world looking for odd creatures. She just sometimes camps out with Harry, with the result of two children. Sorry if that wasn't clear. Harry often favors women who look a bit like Luna.
"T"