I'm usually against OCs when they become involved intimatly with the headcharacter (Aki), but Gyles kinda grew on me; towards the end I felt a little sorry for him.
However, sometimes the story seemed a little too long/detailed, but to be honest I'm tired at the moment so I can't say that the detailness was good or bad for the story.
Anyway, it was a enjoyable story and quite the original in my POV. ^^
Author's response
Thank you very much for the Review. The story indeed may have seemed a bit detailed because 1. it's just the way I write (probably should iron this out) and 2. it was the second fic I ever wrote. I appreciate you reading them and taking the time to comment. Really does mean a lot to me! :)
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