This is interesting. At times it seems to move a bit slow. You seem to be of two minds about the "human girls", with Gabi pushing Harry towards them but Harry saying repeatedly that he won't bond them (once that he's too big -- what happened to his morphing ability???). Personally, while you've "created" some neat consorts for Harry, I would really much, much rather see him "married" to Ginny, Hermione, and Luna (not necessarily in that order) and Tonks as well. Let the OCs be his consorts (or even mistresses, by your levels in ch. 3) and upgrade the real characters to wives. Perhaps, you're already planning something like that, and Harry's reticence is just a plot device. I hope so.
Author's response
Thanks, but I'm afraid I'll disappoint you. Gabrielle has opinions, but she calls Harry Master for a reason. His morphing? He hasn't thought about it yet. I would gladly have used Canon characters, but Rowling only gave me Mme Maxime, Winky and Maris, the merfolk chieftainess to work with, and they don't work for me at all. If I upgrade the human girls and downgrade the part- or nonhumans,
I'll be killing my story. There's plenty of Harry/Multi fics out there. Good luck, and thanks for the review.