The short chapters were annoying, the story was great. The concepts and execution were original, the funny parts really were, and the touching parts weren't overdone. Even the bad jokes were good. Denise, really...
Anyhow, good work. I'm sure I'll enjoy your other stuff, too.
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-Rijl
Author's response
Hey now, Denise is a great name... It's Deuncles you've got to look out for.