Review for When Vernon Didn't Miss

When Vernon Didn't Miss

(#) brad 2007-11-18

What an excellent, chilling, macabre sentence on Vernon! "The next time you fall asleep". Brrrr. Just that creative punishment alone made this chapter.

I like Old One's partial acceptance of Sirius's guilt; they're being open, but you haven't had them automatically assume that the Magical world got it wrong, which would be too simplistic for the story.

I didn't like the use of horcruxes by 'old ones' in your other stories - White Warlock? - but Mo's clarification that the 'death of a sentient' need NOT be murder made it more ethically acceptable, here.

Two animagus forms, hey, once Harry's sorted out the 'conflict'? Nice idea. I wonder if he'll lose one form, and the parseltongue, when Voldemort is vanquished?

Continuing to hate ficwad, FYI; e-mail notifications never work, for you or the other two authors I'm tracking. A visit to the forum here seems to show that the site has many problems.

Author's response

My real choices seem to be ficwad or fiction alley, and I really have no deisre to get paragraphs from their mods scolding me for being an awful writer if there's a space after a hyphen or have to resubmit a chapter if I fail to capitalize Horcrux.

Whatever Harry retains after the Horcrux is broken will stay retained, but not everything can be kept.

"T"