wow, your writing is simply awesome. I love the way you make words fit together, analogies and the metaphors you use really work!
the only thing i geuss you could work on is being a little more concise with some stuff. Sometimes it just seems more powerful that way, but thats totally my opinion. you had this one line that went something like "backing my car out of the driveway, leaving the house tired and empty, like me." idk why but i liked it. sorry if i seem like a major ass for critiquing this at all, especially for my first review but i just wanna help. i normally dont get like this, maybe its cause this is the internet. lol
ok well you have an amazing vocabulary and im really digging your work!
Author's response
You aren't an ass for critiquing. I mean, I did ask for a critique, comment, or compliment, and you gave me all three! (I think?)
---Am glad you enjoyed my story. And I'm glad you liked it enough to review. Thanks tons =DDD