oh. my. good. golly. gosh.
this whole fic was like wow!
i loved it!
good job!
i have one thing.
have you had it edited?
it needs a little editing.
lol
but i totally thought it was amazing!
very hawt. haha!
i love vampires. =]
good job! keep writing!
~Kyoko Naruko
Author's response
Thanks so much! Some of it I've edited and some I haven't I'll have to fix it soon thanks for telling me.