Wow...This beautiful work of art hasn't been reviewed yet?
You captured their relationship perfectly! I never really thought about it like that before!
Author's response
Thank you! I was trying so hard to avoid chessiness, but it's kind of hard when the concept itself is sorta cheesy.
I'd like very much for you to beta some of my stuff if you're interested?
And not to shamelessly promote myself ... but have you read my story on Saiyuki? It's called Gravity. Saw that you liked it on your profile.