The confrontation between Harry and Snape was overdone. Snape is excessively childish and Harry is far too in control to be eleven years old. While exceedingly entertaining and fun to read, this chapter lacked anything resembling realism when it comes to the characters' attitudes and behavior.
Sorry if this looks like a flame, it isn't intended to be one. I just thought I'd say that this story has a great deal of potential for originality, and it'd be a shame to see that potential wasted on cliche scenes that are commonplace in time travel fics. Hopefully the next chapter will be a bit more like the first.
Author's response
- A bit overdone perhaps (that's part of the fun in combining Superheroing with wizardry) but Snape's behavior wasn't terribly different than the canon events of 'accidentally' destroying potion samples handed in for grading, or the repeated demontratable bias he displayed in pretty much every scene he was in... Is this Harry mature? Sure, probably too much so. At 56 I've only got the slightest memories of my own behavior and attitudes at 11.
- I don't take a review as a flame (excepting of course those lovely 'you suc kill you self' notes)