This was a wonderful story. It's a shame it doesn't have more reviews. I just found this site today and while it doesn't have a lot of Silent Hill fanfics, there are some good stories. I think there's not enough fanfic of Alessa and Lisa, or Heather and Lisa for that matter.
Have you thought about posting the story on the SH Fanfic Archive? Or fanfiction.net, for that matter? I know you have some stories there.