I really like the ending.
I also like how Will died. I mean the manner of his death. I like how you diagnosed it as a fever rather than some daring feat or incredibly dramatic heroic deed. It makes the character of Will seem more real and mortal. While you story already illustrates that the strong fall, that teeny, tiny little touch really drove the point home.
Excellent story telling and imagery. Constructive criticism would merely be to improve on the format for something more aesthetically pleasing. Eager to read more!
Thank you. On ff.net, it automatically fixes the format, so I didn't go back and check on this. I hope that this makes it easier to read.