i just read this for the first time....and it is REALLY REALLY good.
first off...any story with patrick as the main love intrest is a thumbs up in my book ;).
also, you are really good at getting the words to form pictures, without being OVERLY descriptive. basically, you're an awesome writer.
therefore, PLEASE KEEP GOING!!!
im sorry i didn't know about this before. :D
-ally-