(#) BenRG 2008-01-06
Actually... I'm sorry to say that a sucky chapter is not better than no chapter at all.
I'm presuming that this chapter was intended to introduce the two OCs (who, as described are something out of an animé). It would have been nice if there had been a bit more happening beyond them meeting and making threats in a pitiful attempt to establish pack dominance.
Thinking about those threats... One day, I'm going to have to work out how Hermione manages to make an overwhelmingly negative first impression on everyone she meets, even when she is being nice. It is a talent, I think, on a par with that enjoyed by Tonks. An aggravatemagus, perhaps? (Please note that I am an H/Hr fan and I still think this :-p ).
Author's response
Good point, but I honestly couldnt think of anything else to add to that chapter, im having a bit of writers block, its a problem of mine, multi-chapter stories are always difficult for me to continue because I have a hard time finding things to fill in the space between the major events. And actually no the OC's are not out of an anime, I just think that hogwarts needs more colorful students, most of the people in the books are all hoidy toidy straight british type people. Thats my oppinion at least.