(#) Vanir 2008-01-06
Well, a sucky chapter with promise is better than a sucky chapter without. This one was a lot easier to read, though. There's a huge warning sign above this story that flashes MANGA!
The references are just too close, and at this point, i haven't read a single good Manga!Potter that works. There just has to be a good story behind the hairdo's. Conservative British magical culture wouldn't stand for it, i believe.
It's a bit sad that hair is the only thing to remark on here. There wasn't much going on, but the characterization of Hermione was pretty damn good. Keep it up, and make it go places.
Vanir
Author's response
Lol thats getting a little annoying, WHY is it that my oc's seem so manga-like? i guess they do come to think of it but their not supposed to be, I just think that the black brown and blonde hair that COMPLETLY populates hogwarts is just a little mundane. as always thanks for the advice Vanir :) and the next chapter hopefully wont take much longer.