I found this story after reading one that was inspired by it, and I have to say that as much as I enjoyed reading "The Death God, Reborn", this one blows it out of the water. Objectively speaking, Dethklok's writing is perhaps slightly better than yours, but the amount of raw emtion you have stuffed into this story is mond-boggling, so much that I had to periodically take breaks to cool off just from reading. I enjoy reading 'super' naruto stories, but the one thing i enjoy more are stories that really show his growth as a person and a fighter. If I were to make one suggestion, it would be to maybe start seeing the reemergence of his former personna. He already seems to be getting more intelligent and mature, but Kisuke was a absolutely brilliant guy, who could have likely beaten the pants off a Nara in strategical analysis, and it would be neat to see some of that relect in Naruto. All in all, a very satisfying read, I can't wait for more.