Fuck, ahhhhhhhh! I can't stop smiling. Seriously, I look like the Cheshire cat or something. This was such a cute chapter. So many things made me laugh and go, "awwwww". Seriousy, amazing job. I'm gonna put down some minor mistakes and some of my favorite lines. The first one because I'm a nitpick, and th esecond one because I'm just cool like that.
"Gerard starred at the name..." I think it's supposed to be stared.
"He could smell Fran’s cologne." Frank's cologne, right?
Okay that's it, only really small mistakes. The writing was perfect, I swear.
"If he didn’t pick up now, he would miss the call. Frank would think he was avoiding him. He’d live alone on the streets forever, begging for change and prostituting himself for money while the harsh, cold winds ripped at his skin." Oh gosh, my favorite line! I laughed.
"The mirror was his best friend, and his reflection was his worst enemy." That is a really good line. Loved it!
“Ithinkyourlaughiscute.” I think everyone loved this. Adorable!
You're an awesome writer...
Author's response
Wow, thanks. And thnks for pointing out those pesky typos. x_x My laptop's keys stick, and even when I re-read my work, I still miss some of the errors. So thank you!
~Finch