Review for The Acts Of Betrayal

The Acts Of Betrayal

(#) jmcqk6 2008-02-15

You really don't need to repeat the ending of each chapter, or change scenes. You have a really good story here, but the repeated scenes really take away from it. Tell one scene from one point of view. If you want to tell the thoughts of another character, do it in another scene, as they reflect on the conversation. We are reading the chapters, if we want to know how the last chapter ended, we'll look at it ourselves.

As I said before, this is a good story, and I am enjoying reading it.