Since it started with a WILL reading I am assuming that Sirius died in Azkaban and wasn't just imprisioned. I also wonder did Sirius leave all of his well everything to others? or was something left for Harry (besides the obvious Potter inheritance) that was rather unclear. Also exactly how old is Harry suppose to be here (you had him in a days old diaper)
I like the way the story is going a loving family for Harry is just what is needed. You need to watch your tenses and pronouns... When you were describing what Petunia was taking from the cupboard you called Harry and it ... sinceit was from Narcissa pov... she wouldn't have done that.
keep up the good work I can't wait to see more. I've added you to my favorites.