FicWad

seems like a good story so far, but reading your latest notes at the end of chapter 3, you might want to rework some of the earlier parts that had hermione in them, because it really did seem like you were setting up to have Ron controlling Hermione through something (one of my first thoughts when reading her earlier segments was along the lines of "Oh, Ron's controlling Hermione with something. wonder what will happen to him..."). I'm fine with that not being the case, it's just that if someone doesn't read the Author's Notes, they're going to be quite confused unless what you mentioned is also mentioned in the story. As for how Voldy was killed and the falling out... well, you seem to have pretty much given a basic explanation to what's going on with the falling out... I personally don't think it needs to be expanded on very much unless some later plot point really needs it. As for Voldemort, I'd also say don't bother with an explanation for it either; rather I'd suggest it becomes a running gag that Harry and Neville have a bet every month or so where Harry tries to convince Albus that he killed Voldy in some outlandish way - i.e. time turner training, heir to __________ (& ________ & _________ & _______ & ________ &... you get the idea), non-human heritage (reinforced upon retelling with various illusions), etc.

So, yeah. other than the confusion over Ron and hermione that I mentioned above, seems like a good story. I look forward to the next chapter, especially after this cliffhanger you've left us with =)