Review for The Oracle

The Oracle

(#) Saphira 2008-03-02

OOC!!! oh-my-god this chapter is so out-of-character for Sasuke. Plus, lovely, who the fuck is Amaya? Don't tell me.
Cookie-cutter plot, sasuke meets this chick who he's supposed to have help him convince her prick of a father to sign the treaty and then he fucks her and falls in love with her, the end. Mary Sue alert, anyone?

Author's response


Ok. this was a bit rude. I don't really think it's quite neccessary to curse there. And no, as of now, I don't intend to have Sasuke sleep with Amaya or see her as anything more than a friend, if that. And as for mary sue, you should talk, after all, Amilan is your character. And yes, She'll be in here, exactly as you portray her, as soon as I find a way to introduce her.