This is amazing so far, and I knid of agree with pyrotechnicist with the plot being slightly cliche, but it's so minimal it doesnt matter.
I truly love this story and the characters, the way you've made them sound and act. The atmosphere is amazing also, and you really should continue quickly with this - it's too good not to be updated quickly.
Update soon,
xox Emmi
Author's response
i wanted to make this more believable and also very entertaining because they are always very entertaining.