Exellent use of character personality and habits. I thought your whole story over all was rather good except for the fact Sango sprung for Miroku sosuddenly that part was a bit unrealistic. Also Naraku would not die so easily remember he regenerates everytime you destroy his body and also you have to destroy his heart to kill him. Well anyways my Fanfic will be on Naruto. ttyl [M]arkus
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Thank you markus, i'll update it again on the weekend i guess