Okay I personally wouldve liked to have seen a bit more of the sex scene with her and the two men but you wrote it well. The fact that she was so wasted made it okay that you didnt detail it too much. I just think that there was a huge opportunity there for her to be mmm humiliated thats all. But she didnt see it as such, i mean she sorta did, thats where the guilt and the nausea came in. \
again this chap was really well balanced. And I think Gerards charac is coming along nicely as well.