Very exciting! You didn't hem and haw to get to the fight, you just plunged the reader right into it! Well done! Is your influence manga/anime or are you going with actual Chinese or Japanese mythos?
You do, however, have a few spelling difficulties, but who doesn't, eh? Some of your sentences seem a little long too. That's not a problem, and is easily cured with a period or two here and again.
Nicely done!
Author's response
Sorry for the late reply. Yeah, I know I messed up some. My influence is pretty much anime/manga, lol, I watch too much and decided to make a story that could hopefully, one day, become a comic. High hopes, but oh, well. Anyways, thank you so much for reading/reviewing and the advice!!