Review for Defeat


(#) fyre_byrd 2005-10-02

This is a very effective drabble. You have the hang of using words sparingly, but to excellent effect.

I only have one question: how does Lulu play in all of those belts? Heh, just kidding. You'd think the game designers would either a) dress the female characters more practically, or b)give them a change of clothes every now and again when they need to be especially active. But of course, you'd think wrong.

I enjoy this story mainly just for the fact that Lulu gets to beat the boys. She seems to me like she would have been a tom-girl growing up.