Hey I like your story, but I gotta tell ya I didnt like having to fix your story before reading it! Your margins suck, big time. I dont know if ficwad did it to you when you downloaded it or if you did it while writing, but go back and look most of your chapters your using only half the page and two chapters the sentences dont have any spaces between them, I dont know about other people but that just hacks me right off, cause before I can read it I have to fix it, and to tell you the truth I sometimes get pissed off while doing it and just blow off the story altogether. so please fix it before downloading it.
The newsgroup screwed up the margins, and FicWad adjusted them again. I'm fixing things as I go. Hopefully the process will be smoother when new chapters are added one at a time. Thanks for reading.