Great. Simply great. The first time I read a story about a 'Dark' Harry who remained human.
And you really got the dark feeling all over it without overdoing it. Death, in it's purest form, the power that comes with it, and what happens if you abuse it. Reminded me a little of NWN 2 - Betrayer's Mask... the shadow world somehow ^^ dunno.
Anyway: brilliant, keep going :)
--Chunky