I've read a lot of Thief Lord fics on other sites, but this is deffinately one of the better ones that I've read. You more or less nailed the relationship between the two boys after the end of the book/movie. I like how the conversation went from lightheartedly joking around to serious and tense. You really captured a lot about the effect of Scipio's change in few words. As far as concrit, all I can really say is that not much happened towards the beginning. It might just be my minuscule attention span at 1:30 in the morning, but it didn't hold my attention and I was ready to turn back. I'm glad I stuck with it, though, because it deffinately picked up. Great job!