Nice done and polished and I like the final version.
I rather suspect that Daphne's note was forced by her father; I do hope she's able to straighten matters out when she returns to Hogwarts. If she doesn't return, I'm willing to bet Harry talks things over with Tracey and may mount a rescue raid (Daphne's father may end up really regretting his actions).
I thought Mr. Granger and Harry discussing Justin was a nice bit of support and I loved the way Harry described his feelings about her.
Author's response
- Thank you
- I can't reveal much without exposing my plot... But consider the power of a head of house...
- Hey, what are 'big brothers' for?