FicWad

This is wonderful! One of the most interesting/refreshing stories I've read in a long time.

The writing crisp, the pacing smooth, and the ambiance...ahh the ambiance.

I'm not sure whether "gritty" is the proper term. Meaty? Real? With substance?

I love how the scene changes with every chapter. More, I love how the mood changes with the scene changes. This is such a pleasure to read (and review!)

I enjoy the asides and the descriptions are just right (in that way that is so hard to achieve, but is recognizable immediately when it's there).

One thing -- four minor things actually -- I noticed several small mistakes/typos but given the overall quality of the work, these few were enough to snag my attention and pull me out of the story slightly.

One: eluded (alluded) to an extensive family
Two: on the lamb (lam)
Three: Oh, where (were) they tempting
Four: snuggly (snugly)

Going back to the fic proper, this is going to sound strange considering how many good lines there are, but I especially enjoyed this line:
"...wanted to know what the other shoe was going to be when it dropped."

It's a familiar phrase, and you managed to add your own twist to it while still keeping the phrase recognizable.

By the way, that pretty much sums up how I feel about the storytelling thus far. The words used are familiar everyday words, everything just flows neatly from one sentence/paragraph/scene to the next, and I'm so completely absorbed in reading that I barely even notice that I'm reading. But while it's a comfortable read, there are subtle twists and at no point do I feel that I've read the same thing before.

Must stop talking. I'm actually in the middle of the chapter right now. I was (unwillingly) pulled out of the story, as I mentioned before, and I decided I might as well take a short break and write this. Need to get back to reading: guy with British accent has just come in -- looks like something exciting is about to happen!