really dont get why you had to have Daphne basicly raped for this story. especially premeditated by her weak nothing of a father and some old man. maybe if Voldie was alive and the opposing force it would have been believable.
as it stands its just twisted for your pleasure.
1st Daph tried to escape multiple times.
2nd she didnt contact anyone, not even Tracey? even if she couldnt contact Harry she woulda got in contact with Tracey to inform Harry.
3rd when Tracey finally comes and confronts her, she wants it kept from Harry.
Daphne earlier was portrayed as a strong willed individual, and now you turned her into a weak victim.
she would have fought and brought in her allies to help.
seriously you could have had Harry save her before the fact, and then let his vengeance run wild. as it is now, your just gonna have him mindlessly slaughter them for his broken love interest.
Harry also doesnt fit the confident characterization he was earlier either. Daphne said she'd floo him.. what happens when she doesnt?? he sulks and does nothing except weak attempts to contact her. if he was any man and cared for her he would have went over there and found out a reason first hand, and also would have contacted her best friend (Tracey). even after her letter he still sulked instead of realizing she was in trouble... sulked to his friends.
only reason he even reacted once back at Hogwarts was bcuz Tracey threatened him... lol
Harry and his friends would have come up with a better plan than wait til back at school, they would have investigated and thought of a more proactive plan than a reactionary.
is sad to see a good story turn into trash! which is what the last 2 chaps are.
Author's response
- I don't understand why it's such a surprise to anyone what happened. I telegraphed what an ass the Elder Greengrass was from the second chapter...
- The entire story is for my pleasure... that and the vast financial rewards.
- Yes, Daphne attempts escape... And fails.
- No, she didn't contact anyone. How could she? She wasn't allowed to use an owl, the House Elves work for her dad, she couldn't get near the floo, and her cell phone battery was dead. Ok, maybe not the last one, but how?
- She knows Harry and what he would try to do. She also knows that Harry doesn't have a legal leg to stand on. Daphne, knowing she was royally screwed, tried to protect Harry.
- She did fight, but had no access to allies.
- I could have, I guess, arriving at the last minute to save the damsel from a fate worse than death is a cliche for a reason I suppose, but I'm not sure how Harry was supposed to know. I guess his Boyfriend Sense could have tingled or something.
- Of course he became a whiny little bitch when he thought she had dumped him. Think about it, that is one of the more common reactions of men who are dumped when they didn't expect it from people who didn't have the horrific upbringing that Harry Potter did. The part of his personality that the Dursley's so carefully nurtured has been expecting Daphne to wise up and leave since their first date.
- Contact Tracey? Who hates him on general principle? Who, if Daphne had dumped him would be laughing her ass off at him? You're right, I don't know why he didn't talk to her while wallowing in self pity.
- No, not because Tracey threatened him. She didn't frighten him in the least. Because he now knows what's going on.
- Ok, with the information they had, AND Daphne's express instructions to leave her alone, what is your 'better proactive plan'? Hopefully one that doesn't break the law?
- I'm not really all that against breaking laws... Harry breaks several in the next chapter. I'm against getting caught breaking laws.
- I'm sorry the story has become trash for you...