oldchuck
A rather unsatisfying story. The biggest problem is that the author appears not to be a native speaker. The clearest evidence is the use of more than one verb tense in the same clause of a sentence. The spelling is reasonable but the author seems to use longer words rather than shorter, perhaps because it appears more "literary?" This author needs help.
The plot line is interesting but the lack of continuity and the non-standard English make it hard to read. I'd like to find out if there is more to be written.
Old Chuck
Author's response
I posted the last chapter for this HP fanfiction.