Ok so i waited a day to cool off/make better with ficwad =D so i feel equal to doing a decent review lol.
I love how Ryan and Helen compliment each other; her warmth vs. his...well...Ryanism (new word :p).I love how Helen is opening Ryan's cynical view of the world to see that he needs someone other than himself. It is so intriguing... I want to know why Helen needs a boy in need, and am looking forward to learning more about Helen in future chapters, aside from her goodness.
another important note (i'm going to keep raving about your story by the way because it breaks the cliches! its orginal! i've been checking ficwad on and off for a while waiting for a good story to pop up! its such a relief):
Your supporting/Original characters are in fact orginal and distinct from one another!! some stories you read, you can't tell each character apart, their tone is the same, and they are mary-sueish. but not yours! yay!
Helen is warm, open, and very good, but maybe she has some stuff going on too. her personality is a compliment to ryan's.
Nicole is like Ryan. cynical, and slightly crazy when she's in the midst of emotional upset (she bakes like a crazy woman...ryan sits out in the rain and beats up his self esteem, bless him).
and Elle is opposed to Ryan. Matter of fact, no nonsense and tough.
squeee. and once again...the kiss was beautiful and wonderfully timed and just what both ryan and helen needed =D.
Author's response
My Gawd.
You have no idea how happy you made me with this review. In fact, I read it like, three times already. I love you, so much. :]
Alrighty. First of all, I love the word 'Ryanism'. And I'm going to use it from now on. :]
That's exatly what I'm trying to portray! How Ryan and Helen compliment each other and that Ryan is learning that he needs someone other than himself (no matter how much he doesn't want to admit it)
Ah, I agree about the mary-sueish characters. And I'm glad I make my characters so disticnt from each other. I usually fear that my characters won't be realistic, but I'm glad someone thinks otherwise. :]
And that is like, the perfect description of my characters. I swear. :]
And yes, yes. Helen does have some problems of her own. I can't make her seem so entirely perfect, even if Ryan does think she is. :]
Gahh, and I'm also glad you liked the kiss. I was actually worrying that people may have not wanted that. But, I am UBER happy to see that people liked the fact that there is a little romance going on between them. :]
Thank you for this great review. It made my whole day. No lie. :]
You rock. :]