love this story - im in the yahoo group that you post bits and pieces of the story in.
One thing I liked in the earlier version: When Harry said something to the effect that Pepper was motherly, and it said something like "Tony smiled, as he filed that away to tell Pepper later, not in a meeting. She would be crying at the end."
I liked that more than the age-concept.
Great job though, looking forward to the next one