(#) Hebi 2006-08-10
I like this so far ^^ I think you have a good story base, and besides a slight overuse of the word 'tomboy' I couldn't find much wrong with it. Eheh, sadly enough what caught my eye was that someone rated this as illiterate--which was totally unfair and wrong, by the way--and I wanted to see if it was true, because I'm stupidly masochistic like that. Anyways, I really did like this. Kaorin and Kagura were perfectly portrayed, and the references to cats were a nice descriptive bonus. Good job! ^_^