(#) uten 2008-07-08
This is the beginning of a what could be great story. I love the novel way you have of giving ghosts a corporeal form. Not only is it a great idea, I also think it's unique!! Congrats! grin
I love the personality you gave Myrtle, it's awesome. The one 'possible' error you do have is actually a little perplexing considering - it's Welsh, not Welch (from what I know - Welch has not been used in an extremely long time and is obsolete). Given Myrtle's 'age' and mixed heritage, she would use the term Welsh, AFAIK.
Anyway, I like the new name of the story and am really looking forward to the next chapter.
Your story is well structured and well written. I'm actually enjoying the lack of DumbAsADoor, although I know that will change, darn it. Hopefully too late to do anything. grin
I'm looking forward to some more explanations of some of the concepts you have introduced, especially a little more on Covens and how they work.
I'm glad Myrtle is involved. I actually like her, and love stories when she finally gets to be happy.
Author's response
Thank you for reading and taking time to do a well thought out review. I’m glad you like the story so far, I tend to write the kind of stuff I like to read, so I’m having fun here – I’m sure Harry is too. . .
My mother’s mother was Welsh, I used the archaic spelling Welch thinking that, since the Wizarding world is still stuck in the Victorian age that it would be appropriate. Apparently no one got it. To avoid distraction I went beck and resubmitted the story with the 20th century spelling.
I think I can say, without fear of contradiction, that I’m Myrtle’s biggest fan – as she’s been featured in the majority of my fanfics. And she always has a happy ending. I Love that little ghost!
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