hmmm....Gerard is a quick one!
I thought it'd be Mikey that first figured it out. I still think that it'll be Mikey that puts it together though. I'm convinced. hehe
I liked the way Gerard figured it out though - that he noticed the eyes. I think it demonstrates how close they all are, that even such a drastic change allowed him to see Frank within "Jason." I think you did really well with that aspect - probably very true.
I'm interested to see how all of this will turn out for poor Frankie...you said I was maybe partially true, so I'm hoping for a happy ending. I'm not very good at them myself, so I like when other people write them well and without all the corn.
I really don't like Jess. In fact, I hate her. She creeps me out.
I still don't understand how/why Frank did not go to the police from the beginning though. It just doesn't make sense to me - sorry I'm kind of dwelling on this, it's the only thing I'm hesitant about this story. Other than that, I love it! Honest!
Update soon! I can't wait!
Cheers
Kat