Although a little confusing it does read like the prologue of a good book but if the rest of the story is as confusing I wouldn't be interested.
Author's response
thank you! and no, the rest of the story will not be anywhere near as confusing as the prologue. in fact, the prologue isn't really my normal style, which means i don't think i could write like that again if i wanted to XD. again, thanks so much for the feedback.