Wow Neve long chapter. I really enjoyed it. I think it's really good how you are mixing real events with your characters. I also like how Jill is not all good and nice and has a feisty side to her. Loving the way both her and Bob are reacting. You worry too much about how people will react to your story and how you write to the guys - i'm loving it and the conversations between the characters are really good.
Author's response
Thanks moonpig and i'm gald you are still enjoying my story. I'm going to have to take some sidetracks from real events and hopefully it won't get to "as if". I'm so happy you reviewed.