Great chapter mate, loving the story and can't wait to see what you have planed next.
Oh I like that Gabrielle could talk to Hedwig. nicely done.
Whatever was in the letter, I like how the three girls reacted to it, I wish we could see what it said.
I like how Leif teaches Harry about contolling his powers.
I like the talk between Harry and Fafnir, and the gift that Fafnir.
Poor Ron, thinking that he is the Boy-Who-Lived, I don't know how he thought that or think that a tickling charm could kill the 'dark guy' Hope he gets will soon - NOT. :P
You do need to sort out the paragraph format.