Very good start! Very nice, vivid and clear descriptions of the setting and actions, and the dialogue is totally in character. Interesting to see these two together. I'll be watching for more of this!
Author's response
Thanks for taking a look and reviewing. I hope you're still enjoying, I am loving writing it although I'm getting a bit hung up on pace - do you think it's getting a bit slow? I'm finding it hard to get from hatred to any emotion more fluffy without it seeming clunky and forced. Every time I sit down and think - right this is the scene where they're going to mellow out a bit they end up having another argument! Damn them both! Any advice?
Jen