HAHAHAHAHAHA! Oh my God, that cracked me up! Oh God, that's probably exactly what I'd end up screaming if I saw Bert anywhere. And I'd imagine him saying something like, "WHERE?!"
Write more. This looks cool. But can you possibly break your story into paragraphs? It's a little bit confusing.
Author's response
Haha yeah. And thanks for the advice will definately try my best with the next chapter but it while as I'm on holiday and I don't have a proper computer and I'm currently writing this using my mums iPod but will do my best to get it out within a month thanks again =)
Ella