This is a great story. The character composites are well done and the children actually think, act & talk their age. Look forward reading the rest of your story.
Author's response
Thank you very much!
I'm glad you found the children age-appropriate; that's one of the things I've been worried about, as... well, let's say that kids born when I was Harry and Hermione's age can drink in the USA, and I've not been around preteenagers for any great length of time in years.