Review for Your Zen Is False

Your Zen Is False

(#) BicycleSighs 2008-08-16

I cannot believe that there are not more reviews for all of your chapters. I cannot believe that this fic is over.
And, over all, I cannot believe that fools dare to rate some of your stories with nonsense drivel such as 'trainwreck' or 'boring' or 'illiterate'. You're so very lucky that you have thirty seven or so other stories for me to read, beginning now.

My favourite line from you isn't even of this story, and it isn't even really a 'line' per se, but I would just like to point out that for some rather unknown reason, the bit of '...as we dance around the pyre...hm hmm hm...' from your Annientamento story with Bella/Sirius (which, by the by, I did absolutely not see as 'smut', but something much more beneath the surface face of it, bubbling just under, unbroken because of Bella's staggering insanity and Sirius' true-to-real-story-life possibilities within his dilemma), that line drove me absolutely stark raving mad, and I keep returning to it even now to read it over and over as I refuse to copy and paste your stories without your permission. Coupled with the fact that it was both one of your leading lines and your closing line, well, you topped off your hat there.

Your writing style is flawless, even in the face of the fact that the parts in your stories in which you break off with parentheses halfway into a sentence, and mostly numerous times within the same sentence, are or were a touch derailing, but as soon as I got more into the flow of your hand, it was a rather refreshing look at things.

I would most likely, if you would so choose to indulge yourself within, take hours upon hours reading and re reading any story that had a personal mark upon it. I suppose what I am attempting to say here, or rather, ask unabashed, is if you would so be deeply inclined to honour my wishes of a story.

My three personal favourites in this world are Bellatrix, Luna, and Tonks, three characters whom tend to be overlooked in fics, or mostly pushed off as secondary characters.
Bella just seems, if nothing else, though she is much more, that she would come off as the ideal female, in any case.

And, if I may say so, a story in which her story, or a story, was told from her point of view, would be rather interesting. Perhaps her being in school in Harry's time. Perhaps there not even being Voldemort. Perhaps Harry and Bella going down the dark path together, and the less reputable characters in the Potterverse being picked off with a bit of sadistic torture thrown in, and all sorts of goodies.

Or, perhaps, I will get to my next point, and say that since those ideas came to play from my fingers, if I may so indulge them in my own story. I have never thought about writing a fic before, though I pride myself on being a rather notched writer, and after reading a rather large handful of your stories, I would have to say that I am quite inspired, to understate it fiercely.
Therefore, I will begin writing a fic, and with your honours, it will be for you.

Deary me, I do tend to have a problem with dragging on and on, do I not. Possibly why my books take forever to finish, when a sentence becomes a page and a half, and a chapter becomes a tome.

Either way, I want to end on a rather lackluster note, since I am positive that I have not made much coherent sense in this spurt and do not wish to continue making a prat of myself, fluent as it may be, and just merely state that I have a newfound and rather deeply rooted appreciate for you and your writing.

Post Script: There is a fic on this site, and posted on a few others, that I believe that you may enjoy, entitled Harry Potter and the Witches Secret. I cannot remember the link for the life of me, and I am much too worn from reading you stories, diligent as I may be to continue, to find it, but it shan't be too difficult with a few typed words and the click of a mouse. I believe the fic has two or three sequels as well, each just as and more than indulging as the last.

And may I also add, as an afterthought, I rather enjoy and applaud your inherent indulgence of homosexual/femmeslash (I believe it is called, I am nowhere familiar with fic-language) situations and character developments.

An observation and appreciation, all in the same.

I would have sent all of this in a messgae of some sort, but I began posting right after reading YZIS, and got a touch carried away.

Now, I really should stop before this turns out to be lengthier than some of the damn stories I've seen on here.

Fare thee well.

Author's response

I actually got a good amount of reviews at FFNet for this fic. grins I don't know what's up with this site, really. It's why I don't post here anymore. shrugs I write for feedback, and if all anyone does is derate my works and not explain why, then I'm going to assume that they have nothing to offer except close-mindedness and that they aren't worth my time.

And I love that you really looked at Annientamento. XD I try to keep things a little bit canonical. You can save a copy of my stories if you like, as long as you don't claim credit or try to post them somewhere else without my permission. Wow, you keep making me blush. I think you're my favorite reviewer now. ^-^

It's meant to be a sort of mental style, I think. I messed around with it, had some fun. It's modeled after thought patterns, and sometimes you don't allow yourself to really think. You cut them off or try to explain, only explanations aren't the same as seeing and so you show. Remember. Gah. I'm not explaining very well. Anyway, I'm glad you managed to enjoy it. It's too bad that you're in the HP fandom. I've got a Naruto story that you'd probably like. Ah well.

Definitely write! We always need more literate fics in the fandom. PLEASE. And in my honor? grins fiercely I love it when I get stories. bounces Do you still want me to write one for you?

You're not making a prat of yourself, dear. And I do think you have a rather nice style yourself, just by reading your reviews. It's rather antique Brit. Spiceh. grins

I shall check out the story when I have a chance. Sadly, it is five twenty in the morning over here and I must sleep. I'm going out of town until Tuesday and I don't know if I'll get computer access, so don't be offended if I don't get a chance to reply until then.

Question: do you not read fanfiction often? You said that you're unfamiliar with the slang.

And as for the femmeslash? I'm a lesbian, dear. I do tend to indulge. ^_-