Hi Dondon,
I got a better picture in my head with what you wrote. I can picture Racheal with a scowl as she looked at them and Julianne's version was over detailed and somehow lost the emotion of the moment. I didn't feel they were startled I felt they knew exactly what happened and by who.
I loved it.
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You don't realise how much that has just made my fucking day, lol!
I thought if I went into too much detail it would seem like I was trying too hard.
Thank you so so much :D
Dondon x