I think this story is absolutely brilliant!!!! It's the best thing I've ever read on ficwad, which is saying something coz I read everything on here! I have no idea how you can possibly think your writing sucks, I love the adjectives, the style, the was you describe not only the characters but the setting, something a lot of amature writers miss. Also how you're not overloading the story with speach and sticking to the same style throughout (although I am yet to read further chapters, I just had to review when I read your notes). You have a real gift, and I personally have not been able to stop reading this story despite the ridiculous hour! I truely wish I could write like you do. Boring? Never! I hope the story continues to enthrall me as did the last chapters. If there is any fault I can find with your writing it was the over-use of the word 'alas' in the first few chapters, but that's not really a flaw, that's just me being picky! Keep up the excellent standard, if I have to review every chapter to keep you writing this story I will! I'm addicted :-D
Author's response
Is this a new reviewer, I spy?
Why yes, I think it is!
YAY!
Firstly, might I say I love you? Because I do. You are the sweetest person ever and this review had totally brightened me up quite a bit. :D
The best thing you've ever read, eh? Wow, I didn't realize that this story was that good to be the best. This comment makes me so extremely happy. :D
Ackk, I have pretty low self-esteem on a lot of things. Writing is just another thing on the list. Although, I'm glad to hear that I'm not overloading the story with speech and adjectives, because that's what I usually fear.
I believe that the flaws I have when writing is that there are too many adjectives and a lot of run-on sentences. BUT-- When you told me that everything is set just right, it caused a huge grin to spread across my face. I'm so glad that things make sense and I'm not too adjective-happy. Haha.
Well, I only thought the few first chapters were slightly boring considering nothing actually happened, yanno? Still, I'm excited that you thought otherwise. :D
LOL; yes, I do tend to use 'alas' a lot when writing, but I'm working on that and someone had mentioned that in a later chapter, so you won't be seeing much of that word anymore. :D
Well, I'm certainly happy to hear that you enjoy this story as much as you do. It makes me feel confident as a writer when I receive such nice reviews like these. Thank you so much for this outstanding review. :D