Excellent as always. I'm always so shocked by you not falling into the common pitfalls of cliche and bad writing. I am eagerly awaiting the next chapters and beyond.
Author's response
Hi Animemonster,
Thanks for reviewing again. Avoiding cliche's is one of my goals. I decided that if I was going to try and write a story, I wanted to write something different, rather than just rehash what others had already done. After all, many of my readers are going to have read the same fics that I have, so what would be the point of following those same story paths? They might as well re-read what's already out there, instead of having to wait around for me to update.
But of course there are some things that can't easily be avoided even though they are cliche; Siri's will & the shopping trip for example. I figure the best I can do is try and focus on adding my differences to that plot device, since leaving it out entirely would make the story unbalanced. The story still needs to be able to stand alone after all.
Thanks for letting me know I'm achieving my goal. :)
Brian